I need help with a query letter. I am doing it right know because for working in my book in my writing class first I have to send them a query letter.
As you know writing in English is sometimes difficult for me but this query letter is giving me a headache. I can’t get it right.
I will paste you here a example, so you can see it:
Muriel Blythe moved to Madrid to study psychology. She needed to get away from everything and everyone to learn how to control her gift. The gift of seeing and conveying emotions.
What she didn’t knew was that being there shadows will start to attack her for a reason unknown for her.
Some strange lights will start to help her, particularly a light between bright and dark. A light that inevitably attracted her.
Now she had to discover who where her attackers, who her defenders and why. Something not easy when nobody wanted to reveal anything. The discovery of a new gift will help her in her quest.
Amid of all this mystery Muriel discovers she has strong feelings for her defender of which she knows nothing. Hence she is torn between her mind and her feelings.
After a shocking revelation she discovers that nothing was as she thought, that in life you must be brave and never give up what you love most.
Glowing shadow is my debut new adult novel, a paranormal romance complete at 85,000 words.
Thank you for your time and consideration.
I will appreciate every tip, comment or suggestion you can make. Thank you!!
Now with some changes you suggested. Thank you!
[An opening line about why you want to work with this particular agent or editor / why they’d be perfect for this project.] ( I will leave this to complete it when I have the name of the agents)
Glowing Shadow is my debut new-adult novel, a paranormal romance complete at 85,000 words.
Muriel Blythe moved to Madrid to study psychology. She needed to get away from everything and everyone to learn how to control her gift: the supernatural gift of feeling what everyone felt around her and make them feel whatever she felt.
But in Madrid, mysterious shadows began to attack her, while strange lights helped her. Muriel struggled to discover what this eerie battle was all about, and why she had been drawn into the center of it. The discovery of being able to make astral trips helped her in her quest.
At the same time, Muriel developed strong feelings for her defender. One of the lights that in reality was a man. A man that make her feel love; something she never felt before. She loved him even when she didn’t knew who or what he really was but she was certain that he wasn’t totally a light, he was between light and shadow.
After founding why she had her supernatural gifts and that her love was forbidden, she also discovered that nothing was as she thought, that in life you must be brave and never give up what you love most.